11.20.2009

HW 24 - Short Story 1

When Pakho snaps a picture of the beautiful sunset and planning to upload it when he gets home, he saw one of the class clown passing by that caused him to giggle.

“Ha…what a loser.”

The wind blows through Pakho and the class clown Eddie as they walk pass by each other. Meanwhile, the tiny small sunlight cause the cloud to completely separate from each other. The dark ones and the dark orange ones, all blend in together hanging upon the sky.

Simultaneously, Shawn walks out from a fashion shop and saw Pakho, one of the good friends.

“Have you seen the Olympus PEN E-P2 yet?”
“Yeah, the electronic view finder is hot!”
“Right. They are mailing it to me; I probably will receive it by tomorrow.”
“You want to check out what I just bought?”
“Sure.”
“Wow, this ‘Levi’s 501 Unbuttoned’ fits you so much man.”
“Where are you going now?
“I will head to DJ Becareful’s new opening bar to cheer for him.”
“Another new bar?”
“Yeah.”
“Okay, have a good time; I am going home to upload some of my new pictures. Check them out.”
“Sure! Nice Subcrew X Clot Cap!”

“Thanks.”

While the MacBook Pro is turning on, Pakho takes off his JS Wings and grabs his guitar to play few notes. Sits down on his little couch, grabs the USB and starts uploading his new updated photos, 1000 comments from the old post. Mostly are from the girls.

Smiles a little, upload succeed.

Signs in Maskbook, uploads his new modeling pictures for some known brands. Fingers typed in
http://www.clotinc.com/ and sees himself being the CEO of the brand in his head.

Goes back to Maskbook page and looking at what’s going on to the people in his school.

Lame. This is stupid. Boring. Living in the age of dinosaurs. Not COOL.

Checks out the anonymous blog that he usually goes, and loves almost every line this person writes.

Lights dim, shower, sleep.

Sunrise, puts on the clothes that he usually wears and sprays some perfume. Put on his bags, goes out and shoot.

Walking along the beach and saw his friends Shawn and the class clown Eddie. Even DJ Becareful is there. Fishing.

As he walks over and greets his friends, his eyes are wide open and have a question mark face to his friend Shawn. Winds blow on him and the sunlight has a very soft orange and a darker orange reflected to the clouds. All combines into one hanging on the sky.

“Hey, I know. But seriously fishing doesn’t mean it is not cool. It is one of DJ Becareful’s favorite activities.”
“Oh! Cool. I still have to shoot a few more photos. See you and have a good one.”
“Hey, I like your camera. Check out my blogs, we can be friends.”
“Sure. I am trying this new one that I just got it this morning.”
“Oh, I got it too. But I didn’t open the box yet.”
“Nice! I’ll check it tonight. See you all.”

Walk passing the cooler ones and the chilly winds are like sharp pins blowing through him. His shadows fade away.

Goes back home and signs in his blog account. Saw DJ Becareful’s fishing pictures and his new bar pictures. Right on the left corner, there are some recommend links that DJ Becareful post. One of them is exactly the same as the ones he used to go everyday by some unknown person. But DJ Becareful named the link differently; it said Eddie – very cool insightful writer.

Right at this moment, Pakho is absolute defeated.

The cool game is OVER.

4 comments:

  1. Bao Lin

    I really love this story, it portrays how someone feels he is cool because he is who he is and he is not ashamed. It is also true that someone "cool" looses their coolness because they see cooler people. It makes them want to be like them which makes them lame. But I really enjoy reading this story

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  2. HI!
    I thought your story was very cool and the characters and their names were very funny. The ending was a great one and it shows how "cool" people can be defeated if their "insight" is not "cool" enough. xD
    -Jia Min

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  3. “Hey, I know. But seriously fishing doesn’t mean it is not cool. It is one of DJ Becareful’s favorite activities.”
    “Oh! Cool. I still have to shoot a few more photos. See you and have a good one.”

    I thought it was an interesting point that when a cool person does something, that activity is cool by association, even if it usually isn't. The twist at the end is interesting. Parkho is the cool character at the beginning because he's just doing what he likes, by taking pictures and kind of appreciating everything but he thinks Eddie is a loser for being the class clown. When it turns out the anonymous blog that he admires is Eddie he seems less cool because he was looking down on him. So in the end, it shows that people you think may not be cool maybe cooler than you.

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  4. Your story portrays whats it like nowadays. As soon as something is cool, everyone wants to try it. This seems like a game of "follow the leader" and right there, Pahko lost his title when he himself decided to try something new and was beaten by a class clown, Eddie, who he thought was loser. This story shows that the "cool system" can change dramatically and anyone caught doing something stupid can change from being the best to being the worst.

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